too blunt?

[PCinSD]

Caveat: Acting on any opinion I have would probably be a mistake.

But . . . your usage of the phrase “Just adding more ugly pictures will not help” could be left out. I’m sure if you asked the client if “adding more ugly pictures” to the listing would help – they would obviously say no. It is not necessary to the advice you’re giving and may even have a negative effect.

Is it safe to assume that you are not being paid to give any specific advice regarding the price, other than pointing out that it needs to be lowered?

The phrase “invest in some paint” seems a bit snarky coming via a written opinion from a professional. Wouldn’t a client prefer to see “the exterior and/or interior should be painted”? And maybe even advice on color scheme?

About the security guard or handyman approach: Do you have an opinion as to which option you think is the right one, for this house, in that neighborhood? Again, that may be outside the scope of your task, I don’t know.

Same with the advice about keeping the exterior clean and tidy. Your idea of clean and tidy may be completely different than that of the client, so maybe expand a bit on what you mean.

It seems most of your advice is small one-liner zingers which are more aimed at driving home an obvious point in a fairly negative way. I think you can change the tone of the letter and still maintain the honesty you feel the client deserves.

I would lose the part where you apologize for being blunt and informing the client what you are being paid for. Again, just seems awkward and unnecessary to see that in a professional letter. And, if the tone is changed, the same info will be sent but without seeming quite so blunt, and you won’t feel the need to apologize.

Frankly, same with the rest of the letter. It seems like you are more on a personal rant, rather than providing a professional, written opinion. You’ve chosen a writing style for this letter that comes across as unnecessarily blunt, and in some instances, perhaps rude.

The client needs to hear the honest truth given the facts, but deserves to have it presented in a more professional, and possibly a more helpful, manner. Just my 2 cents, but as written, that letter would never leave my office.

[KSMountain]

I noticed the same two lines that pabloesq did, “ugly pictures” and “invest in some paint”.

I think you could say “adding more unflattering pictures will not help”, and “giving the entire building a fresh coat of paint would likely be a very good investment”.

[KSMountain]

I noticed the same two lines that pabloesq did, “ugly pictures” and “invest in some paint”.

I think you could say “adding more unflattering pictures will not help”, and “giving the entire building a fresh coat of paint would likely be a very good investment”.

[KSMountain]

I noticed the same two lines that pabloesq did, “ugly pictures” and “invest in some paint”.

I think you could say “adding more unflattering pictures will not help”, and “giving the entire building a fresh coat of paint would likely be a very good investment”.

[KSMountain]

I noticed the same two lines that pabloesq did, “ugly pictures” and “invest in some paint”.

I think you could say “adding more unflattering pictures will not help”, and “giving the entire building a fresh coat of paint would likely be a very good investment”.

[KSMountain]

I noticed the same two lines that pabloesq did, “ugly pictures” and “invest in some paint”.

I think you could say “adding more unflattering pictures will not help”, and “giving the entire building a fresh coat of paint would likely be a very good investment”.

[urbanrealtor]

I appreciate the opinions and insight.

In reading the reactions as well as the the letter, it occurs to me that I am betraying too much of my frustration at having this conversation repeatedly.

I think that a better choice of words would soften the whole rant component of it while maintaining bluntness.

In rereading it, I think that bluntness needs to stay, though perhaps in a more polished way.

Additionally, I think I should add some more specific and constructive price advice.

Fair enough.

I thank the peanut gallery for the opinions. expressed.

[urbanrealtor]

I appreciate the opinions and insight.

In reading the reactions as well as the the letter, it occurs to me that I am betraying too much of my frustration at having this conversation repeatedly.

I think that a better choice of words would soften the whole rant component of it while maintaining bluntness.

In rereading it, I think that bluntness needs to stay, though perhaps in a more polished way.

Additionally, I think I should add some more specific and constructive price advice.

Fair enough.

I thank the peanut gallery for the opinions. expressed.

[urbanrealtor]

I appreciate the opinions and insight.

In reading the reactions as well as the the letter, it occurs to me that I am betraying too much of my frustration at having this conversation repeatedly.

I think that a better choice of words would soften the whole rant component of it while maintaining bluntness.

In rereading it, I think that bluntness needs to stay, though perhaps in a more polished way.

Additionally, I think I should add some more specific and constructive price advice.

Fair enough.

I thank the peanut gallery for the opinions. expressed.

[urbanrealtor]

I appreciate the opinions and insight.

In reading the reactions as well as the the letter, it occurs to me that I am betraying too much of my frustration at having this conversation repeatedly.

I think that a better choice of words would soften the whole rant component of it while maintaining bluntness.

In rereading it, I think that bluntness needs to stay, though perhaps in a more polished way.

Additionally, I think I should add some more specific and constructive price advice.

Fair enough.

I thank the peanut gallery for the opinions. expressed.

[urbanrealtor]

I appreciate the opinions and insight.

In reading the reactions as well as the the letter, it occurs to me that I am betraying too much of my frustration at having this conversation repeatedly.

I think that a better choice of words would soften the whole rant component of it while maintaining bluntness.

In rereading it, I think that bluntness needs to stay, though perhaps in a more polished way.

Additionally, I think I should add some more specific and constructive price advice.

Fair enough.

I thank the peanut gallery for the opinions. expressed.

[Coronita]

Blunt I think is fine. Being unrefined however might rub people the wrong way…I think you need to remove some of the decorative adjectives…..

My comments below…. (I’m not an engrish major, so you can wordsmith it)…

———————————————–
Mr. (client name deleted).

(agent name deleted) has asked me to email you the photos we have of your property.

They are attached to this email.

In the interest in helping you sell your property with the best selling price, I want to make the following suggestions and comments:

1)The photos you’ve included do not present your home well. We need photos that show the best parts of your home.

2) The property needs to be painted. Also, we must do something to prevent the property from constantly being vandalized with graffii

3) The front yard needs to be cleaned up and personal items need to be picked up and cleaned

4) The large, aggressive dogs must be removed from the premises, as it is intimidating potential buyers from looking.

5) It is priced too high, above comparable homes in the same area.

The issues #1-5 I indicated above are preventing this home from showing well and being considered by potential buyers. This home is has immense potential if these things are addressed.

It gets lots of looks online. Loopnet shows a view count of 676 views in the last 30 days. This means it is getting looked at regularly.
It also means it is getting looked at approximately 650-700 times per month (just on Loopnet) or about 23 times per day.

However, as I mentioned, it is getting and dismissed by possible buyers and by their agents due to the problems I indicated above… and it is overpriced.

I strongly recommend that you
-lower the price (at least to a point where you are competitive with the nearby listings)
-repaint the house and hire either a security guard or a handyman to deal with the graffiti

-take a hard line with the tenants about keeping the exterior clean and tidy

-please take pictures that show this home in better light. The current pictures does not portray the home in it’s full potential, so I am advising you to find retake pictures of the home that highlight it’s best parts. If you need someone to offer some critique of the pictures, I’ll be happy assist.

This might seem like a lot of things I’m suggesting. However, I just want to make sure that your home is prepared so that it can unlock the best selling price possible. While I understand you also want your asking price, unfortunately, your home will not sell with your asking price given the current market conditions and in it’s current state….So consider either lowering the asking price or making the improvements I suggested or (preferably) both….We simply cannot sell your home in it’s current condition, at the price you are asking for…

As always, we value your business.
Thank you.

[Coronita]

Blunt I think is fine. Being unrefined however might rub people the wrong way…I think you need to remove some of the decorative adjectives…..

My comments below…. (I’m not an engrish major, so you can wordsmith it)…

———————————————–
Mr. (client name deleted).

(agent name deleted) has asked me to email you the photos we have of your property.

They are attached to this email.

In the interest in helping you sell your property with the best selling price, I want to make the following suggestions and comments:

1)The photos you’ve included do not present your home well. We need photos that show the best parts of your home.

2) The property needs to be painted. Also, we must do something to prevent the property from constantly being vandalized with graffii

3) The front yard needs to be cleaned up and personal items need to be picked up and cleaned

4) The large, aggressive dogs must be removed from the premises, as it is intimidating potential buyers from looking.

5) It is priced too high, above comparable homes in the same area.

The issues #1-5 I indicated above are preventing this home from showing well and being considered by potential buyers. This home is has immense potential if these things are addressed.

It gets lots of looks online. Loopnet shows a view count of 676 views in the last 30 days. This means it is getting looked at regularly.
It also means it is getting looked at approximately 650-700 times per month (just on Loopnet) or about 23 times per day.

However, as I mentioned, it is getting and dismissed by possible buyers and by their agents due to the problems I indicated above… and it is overpriced.

I strongly recommend that you
-lower the price (at least to a point where you are competitive with the nearby listings)
-repaint the house and hire either a security guard or a handyman to deal with the graffiti

-take a hard line with the tenants about keeping the exterior clean and tidy

-please take pictures that show this home in better light. The current pictures does not portray the home in it’s full potential, so I am advising you to find retake pictures of the home that highlight it’s best parts. If you need someone to offer some critique of the pictures, I’ll be happy assist.

This might seem like a lot of things I’m suggesting. However, I just want to make sure that your home is prepared so that it can unlock the best selling price possible. While I understand you also want your asking price, unfortunately, your home will not sell with your asking price given the current market conditions and in it’s current state….So consider either lowering the asking price or making the improvements I suggested or (preferably) both….We simply cannot sell your home in it’s current condition, at the price you are asking for…

As always, we value your business.
Thank you.

[Coronita]

Blunt I think is fine. Being unrefined however might rub people the wrong way…I think you need to remove some of the decorative adjectives…..

My comments below…. (I’m not an engrish major, so you can wordsmith it)…

———————————————–
Mr. (client name deleted).

(agent name deleted) has asked me to email you the photos we have of your property.

They are attached to this email.

In the interest in helping you sell your property with the best selling price, I want to make the following suggestions and comments:

1)The photos you’ve included do not present your home well. We need photos that show the best parts of your home.

2) The property needs to be painted. Also, we must do something to prevent the property from constantly being vandalized with graffii

3) The front yard needs to be cleaned up and personal items need to be picked up and cleaned

4) The large, aggressive dogs must be removed from the premises, as it is intimidating potential buyers from looking.

5) It is priced too high, above comparable homes in the same area.

The issues #1-5 I indicated above are preventing this home from showing well and being considered by potential buyers. This home is has immense potential if these things are addressed.

It gets lots of looks online. Loopnet shows a view count of 676 views in the last 30 days. This means it is getting looked at regularly.
It also means it is getting looked at approximately 650-700 times per month (just on Loopnet) or about 23 times per day.

However, as I mentioned, it is getting and dismissed by possible buyers and by their agents due to the problems I indicated above… and it is overpriced.

I strongly recommend that you
-lower the price (at least to a point where you are competitive with the nearby listings)
-repaint the house and hire either a security guard or a handyman to deal with the graffiti

-take a hard line with the tenants about keeping the exterior clean and tidy

-please take pictures that show this home in better light. The current pictures does not portray the home in it’s full potential, so I am advising you to find retake pictures of the home that highlight it’s best parts. If you need someone to offer some critique of the pictures, I’ll be happy assist.

This might seem like a lot of things I’m suggesting. However, I just want to make sure that your home is prepared so that it can unlock the best selling price possible. While I understand you also want your asking price, unfortunately, your home will not sell with your asking price given the current market conditions and in it’s current state….So consider either lowering the asking price or making the improvements I suggested or (preferably) both….We simply cannot sell your home in it’s current condition, at the price you are asking for…

As always, we value your business.
Thank you.

[Coronita]

Blunt I think is fine. Being unrefined however might rub people the wrong way…I think you need to remove some of the decorative adjectives…..

My comments below…. (I’m not an engrish major, so you can wordsmith it)…

———————————————–
Mr. (client name deleted).

(agent name deleted) has asked me to email you the photos we have of your property.

They are attached to this email.

In the interest in helping you sell your property with the best selling price, I want to make the following suggestions and comments:

1)The photos you’ve included do not present your home well. We need photos that show the best parts of your home.

2) The property needs to be painted. Also, we must do something to prevent the property from constantly being vandalized with graffii

3) The front yard needs to be cleaned up and personal items need to be picked up and cleaned

4) The large, aggressive dogs must be removed from the premises, as it is intimidating potential buyers from looking.

5) It is priced too high, above comparable homes in the same area.

The issues #1-5 I indicated above are preventing this home from showing well and being considered by potential buyers. This home is has immense potential if these things are addressed.

It gets lots of looks online. Loopnet shows a view count of 676 views in the last 30 days. This means it is getting looked at regularly.
It also means it is getting looked at approximately 650-700 times per month (just on Loopnet) or about 23 times per day.

However, as I mentioned, it is getting and dismissed by possible buyers and by their agents due to the problems I indicated above… and it is overpriced.

I strongly recommend that you
-lower the price (at least to a point where you are competitive with the nearby listings)
-repaint the house and hire either a security guard or a handyman to deal with the graffiti

-take a hard line with the tenants about keeping the exterior clean and tidy

-please take pictures that show this home in better light. The current pictures does not portray the home in it’s full potential, so I am advising you to find retake pictures of the home that highlight it’s best parts. If you need someone to offer some critique of the pictures, I’ll be happy assist.

This might seem like a lot of things I’m suggesting. However, I just want to make sure that your home is prepared so that it can unlock the best selling price possible. While I understand you also want your asking price, unfortunately, your home will not sell with your asking price given the current market conditions and in it’s current state….So consider either lowering the asking price or making the improvements I suggested or (preferably) both….We simply cannot sell your home in it’s current condition, at the price you are asking for…

As always, we value your business.
Thank you.

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